@adithya I am always a fan of your singing ;o
I 100% support you making a full song bruh.
@Mars Life here is toxic, though quite exotic. Living every breath at my screen like I'm boxed in, sucked into the game known as Shinobi Life, it isn't real though it's just online but that's fine, smacking people in the face with Chidori but if you battle Mars I promise you'll be left sore see, he isn't weak shit 'cause he spent hours on the game, back then it was kinda lame, jousted people till he got into the hall of fame and back then Himitsu was more than a name.
So many clans and so many orgs and the game is still yet to have any lores but there is still many doors that yet to be open, game is patching to make it less broken and if you ask me, it's improving overnights even though the community gets into many fights we still live like a family just ask people about the community vs Sanji.
Aaaaand cba to continue lol. Idk if you can understand my flow or anything of it but it's pretty shitty.. yeah.. You probably wanted someone to actually make a rap and spit it on Youtube to an instrumental, right? Well give me a couple of weeks
All together not bad. I like your flow but it's still mediocre.
You've got the basic of rhyme (some the bars were forced just so they can rhyme), but if you want to make a higher grade rap; you'd have to get deeper meanings for your lyrics and add an instrumental in the background if you're serious.
I know this was all a joke but I like to criticize, especially when it's rap.
As much as your feedback was somewhat good... This was far from something I would be proud of. It was whatever I thought of I typed. As in no editing went into it nor effort. If I wanted I could probably make something a lot better but quite frankly there would be no point seeing as:
1. Reading a rap compared to hearing one is different. You wouldn't understand if I was getting skippy, changing it up or understand most of the play on words.
2. I don't care enough about SLO (No offence to the die hard fans) to make something serious... Nor would it be possible to make something meaningful when it comes to this sort of subject... It's a pre-alpha game, not a heart-aching life story.
3. Rap isn't something I religiously do, it's a hobby. I don't aim to seek praise from anyone here.. Especially you of all people (No offence bud.. But you're not someone I consider close to at all... even online standards.)
Thanks anyway dude but I won't be making a debut album anytime soon.. No need to add an instrumental.. Lol.
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