Onimaro Himitsu

[Leebz]

A very interesting character. I like how you linked your history to your family members, that actually are members of the community. However there is something that you should change- my suggestion. It says that Kazuki is 2 years youger than Kurai, but if you check their bios, is exactly the other way around.
Modifying it, it won't affect too much the main history.

Thanks for the feedback. I think we had a small discussion on Skype about working our characters together and decided Mars was our first child and Shivraj was our second. Being the second child Shivraj lacked attention and due to Mars' hair being blue (Unseen in the Himitsu family for generations) Mars got even more attention. This made Shivraj feel unloved and with his backstory of having a rough life (Check my latest chapter in my Himitsu story) he goes rogue and tries to unite the villages to make the world happier and to make sure no one feels the pain he did as a child.. Or so to speak. I am still unsure if @Mars and @Shivraj agree to this sort of storyline as we never really finished that conversation. If they do decide to switch and Shivraj be older than Mars' then I will change it

[Shivraj]

@Leebz I like the storyline you made

[Sanji]

all of the tinges in this character is a great