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Takumi Himitsu
« on: November 29, 2016, 16:05:05 »
Name: Takumi Himitsu
Age: 16
Gender: Male
Height: 1.76
Weight:70
Hairstyle: Short
Facial hair: No
Hair color: Red
Eye color: Red
Blood type: Unknown
Primary chakra nature: Fire
Hidden Village: Hidden Hill
Clan:
Good or evil at heart?: good, but not too

Description of the character's personality: A very calm person, usually detached from other people, but he has some friends and will not hesitate to risk his life to protect them. He follows orders without hesitation, whatever it is. Always trying to measure his strength to get better, and would do anything to aquire more power .... it is to be able to protect friends or greed of power, even he knows ...

Description of the character's history ( SHORT STORY ): Born in a forgotten country, and the day he was born his mother died in childbirth, did not have many friends because he preferred to work out somewhere instead of playing. When he was six years, one day while he was training with the fire jutsu, unintentionally hurt his 1 year older brother who died shortly after. Remorse and shame fled from his country and reached the hidden Hill village. He enrolled at the Academy and passed it at years eight, shortly after he became chunin and now, at 16 years, is about to join the ANBU forces.

Combat style: Usually it ends once his opponent using genjutsu and fire style jutsu, but is also known for its speed and dexterity with Kunai. when fighting immediately tries to understand the opponent's fighting style and to understand the weak points.

I hope that this description is better than the previous one, although I try to add an image of the character ;)






credit to CaioDarT for the character image

Description of the character's history ( LONG STORY ):   (I will use " to mean thoughts,I will use < to mean the dialogues)

                  1 day, NICE DAY:

"It's a nice day," he thought Hizashi. <You have decided how you will call the baby? >
<Certainly, will be named Takumi>, <Takumi eh .... it's a beautiful name>
 they walk to the hospital
<Well I now go back to Wizaki ... I wonder if he's still asleep>
<Ok so there are nurses to help me, see you later>
<Good luck my love,see you soon>
he walking up to the house
<Thank you mom, now I'm here>
approaching the cradle of Wizaki
<Hei Wizaki, you're going to have a little brother, you know ?>
few hours later
"Well, the baby has eaten and is sleeping, I go back to the hospital"
enters the hospital and comes to meet a doctor them
<Is Mr. Hizashi? >
<Yes sure, how's my wife, and the child? >
the doctor's expression became sad
<The baby is fine, but his wife ... I'm sorry she left us during childbirth>
Hizashi almost fainted
<I-impossible ... no ... w-why? >
< We're sorry, we have done everything possible >
< I do not believe it ... now....now how am I going? >
another doctor approaches with a series of documents
< I'm really very sorry sir, you must sign here )
< o-ok...>
< ok, now we'll do, you can come and take the baby tomorrow, he has already chosen the name?
< Takumi, he will be called takumi >
< ok sir, see you tomorrow >
< o-ok see you tommorrow >

        6 years old, FATAL DAY:
<Come on brother we have breakfast and go to play>
<come on Wizaki another minute>
<If you get up there now train together tonight ok? >
<You promised me, remember it>
<Sure! >
run down the stairs making a competition
<Ah I won I> said Takumi
<All luck, next time you will see who will win>
<It is as you say hehe>
<Started already? breakfast is on the table, do not be late I recommend> said Hizashi
<Thanks Dad> said Wizaki
<Thanks Dad> repeated Takumi
eat breakfast and run out
<Go looking Tubuzi and other> said Wizaki
<Ok go> said Takumi
They are running in the village for about 10 minutes
<Here they are! > Said Takumi
approach the group of kids
<Hey guys how are you? > Began Wizaki
<Wizaki behold you were looking for> said Tubuzi
<We> said Takumi
<Ah, there you are too, too bad> said another kid of the group
" what wants this guy?" He thought Takumi
Wizaki was about to reply, but was stopped by Takumi
<Does not do anything, I had not wanted to play with them> said Takumi
<But it is not fair..> he replied Wizaki
<Do not worry, i begin the workouts immediately, see you later> said Takumi
He runs to the place where he always trains
"I do not need to bother with them, beginning immediately exercise with shurikens "

few hours later

"I do not want Takumi has another day alone to train, I go to him so we play together," thought Wizaki
starts to run where Takumi trains
"I could make them a joke, maybe leaping out of nowhere hihi"
Meanwhile Takumi ...
"Very well, now begin with fire style ... uh?"
"What was that? Came from the bush, maybe it's an animal, if I take it who knows what face will Wizaki haha" thought Takumi
"Very well, the signs are these .... fire style: fireball jutsu !!!" He thought Takumi When He used the technique
<Aaaahhhh>
"What? This is the voice of Wizaki"
He runs into the bush and sees his brother all burned
<What are you doing here? oh no I'm sorry I'm sorry, I did not beg, you resist> said Takumi panicked
<Wow, beautiful fireball ... you have become good * cough *, you will become ....> he was saying Wizaki
<Shut up you to the hospital now, you'll see that everything will be fine> Takumi said he was already crying
"Oh no I do not even know a healing jutsu"
<Takumi ... * cough * you will become a great shinobi * cough * goodbye brother > said Wizaki and then became motionless
<No, no, no no no NOOO> Takumi yelled that now was crying desperately
"It's all my fault, if I had not insisted to train nothing would happen"
he still wept for so many minutes .... Wizaki of the heart had stopped beating
"I have to get out of here, how could I do such a thing" now Takumi was desperate, not reasoned more clearly, he did not know what to do, and with shame in the heart began to race.
ran for a long time later he found himself in front of a precipice ... the idea was tempting, after all had lost what was most dear to the world.
slowly walked to the edge, there was a small river, the chances of survival were minimal.
"I'm getting older brother, forgive me"
He stepped forward
excruciating pain all over the body, silence.
hands touching him, someone was taking Takumi.
silence again
<Wi-za-ki .....>
<he talked! > Someone said
<Soon call the medical team>
<W-hat ...> Takumi was going to say
some days later
" where I am ?"


 WORK IN PROGRESS, new chapters as soon as possible !!! I hope that these are written in a readable English :)
« Last Edit: January 24, 2017, 16:38:26 by takami »



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Re: Takumi Ukita
« Reply #1 on: November 30, 2016, 14:35:03 »
Description of the character's personality:/

Description of the character's history:/

What an emotional past(!)

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Re: Takumi Ukita
« Reply #2 on: November 30, 2016, 14:43:32 »
much simple much wow, much kappa




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Re: Takumi Ukita
« Reply #3 on: November 30, 2016, 15:35:28 »
dope character. I luv his personality
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« Reply #4 on: November 30, 2016, 22:48:44 »
noted
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Re: Takumi Ukita
« Reply #5 on: November 30, 2016, 23:19:14 »
much simple much wow, much kappa
nice char mein




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Re: Takumi Ukita
« Reply #6 on: November 30, 2016, 23:47:50 »
Welcome to the forum.
I would suggest adding some more information on your character profile.
If you need help, refer to the links in my signature, they should help you get started.

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Re: Takumi Ukita
« Reply #7 on: December 05, 2016, 17:58:46 »
actually is a really incomplete description, so I will try to work of the imagination to add things ... I hope it will be a decent thing because I'll use the translator :)

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Re: Takumi Ukita
« Reply #8 on: December 20, 2016, 17:45:15 »
Damn! I like the new story! :D
Killed his baby brother though... That's sad D:

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« Reply #9 on: December 20, 2016, 19:24:26 »
Wow. Killing his younger brother...dark, very dark.
Its wayy more interesting now.
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Re: Takumi Ukita
« Reply #10 on: December 20, 2016, 19:47:59 »
Thank you, in the future I will try to expand the story and make it very long and more detailed.

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Re: Takumi Himitsu
« Reply #11 on: December 23, 2016, 01:02:31 »
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« Reply #12 on: December 23, 2016, 01:30:40 »
Nice work Takami. Looking forward to reading more of the chapters man
Good job




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Re: Takumi Himitsu
« Reply #13 on: December 23, 2016, 01:33:44 »
Damn.
That is a really good story.
I can't wait to see more!

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Re: Takumi Himitsu
« Reply #14 on: December 23, 2016, 12:35:46 »
Dialogue is a little hard to follow (I assume English isn't your first language, so it's not a big issue.) but other than that, great story man. :)

 

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