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Author Topic: Ragna Zeimatsu (UPDATED STORY AND DETAILS 2)  (Read 646 times)

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Ragna Zeimatsu (UPDATED STORY AND DETAILS 2)
« on: June 16, 2017, 00:27:34 »
Name : Ragna Zeimatsu

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Age : 16

Gender : Male

Height : 1.70

Weight : 60 kg

Hairstyle : something like sasuke's hair in boruto

Facial hair : None

Hair color : Red (Zeimatsu's clan hair color)

Eye color : Blue-and-white the left one (The blue color is Zeimatsu's clan eye color,but some children have the potential to have the Holly Energetic White Eye ,,HeWe" for short )

Blood type : 0-

Primary chakra nature : Lightning
 
Hidden Village : Inferunogakure

Clan : Zeimatsu clan

Good or evil at heart? : As bright as the white sky,but don't try to use it,it will turn darker than the nothing

Description of the character's personality : I'm friendly unless you try me,I am serious and I like strategy,but fighting to win is my first priority

 : Description of the character's history :

The story starts in Ragna's fifth birthday party in Zeimatsu's village (Zem).It was a big party for Ragna because he is the Grandson of Great Ragna,the one who managed to defeat the Uchidan.
It was the time for Ragna to obtain his presents.After a lot of kunais books and little presents,it was the time for Ragna to obtain his hidden potential,the HeWe.Great Ragna putted his hand on Ragna's head,and focused,he lended some of his power to Ragna,until his left eye bleed.The healers healed his eye,and when he blinked,his eye from blue went white.He finally awakened his potential,all the village cheered for him.
After that,he went with his friends in the borders of the small village to play while the Uchidan attacked.Ragna sensed some big power and his eye hurt,he told his friends to go hide quickly.They were going to hide into a cave when a Uchidan member found them.He attacked and killed one of Ragna's best and oldest friend (Shizou),Shizou protected Ragna by taking the kunai attack.Ragna fell on the ground,hopeless,then quickly looked at the Uchidan and said ,,You aren't tough,are you" then the Uchidan flinched and started screaming.That made some Inferunogakure and Kazangakure passengers come.When they came they saw Ragna holding Uchidan's head,they freaked out,then Ragna's friends explained what happened.The shinobi passengers understood and took them to Zem.When they finally got there,it was all burned,with dead bodies all over the place,all the children searched for their parrents.Ragna and an Inferno shinobi met Great Ragna nearly dead,his lasts word were given to the inferno shinobi ,,Get Ragna to Inferunogakure,and,protect him"and Then Ragna's eyes were covered in tears.The shinobi touched his back and said ,,It's time to go and make your old man's task".He putted Ragna on his back and said the task to the other shinobis.The shinobis and the children were running to Inferunogakure.They were so close while Uchidan came to finish the job.A specific Uchidan looked Ragna straight to the eyes and said ,,You little scrub,you killed my brother,I WILL KILL YOU"then attacked with all he got.The shinobis protected the children till their last breathes.The shinobis won the battle,and returned to their path,until the trees were starting to mach,then they understood that they were caught in a genjutsu.The trees trapped all the shinobis and children into small tree-jails.The specific Uchidan gone to the jail with Ragna and the inferno shinobi.He got back from ragna to stab him with a kunai but the shinobi turned and the kunai hit the shinobi's chest,then the shinobi said Ragna to jump off him and he used a strong chidori nagashi.After that,the genjutsu released and the inferno shinobi fell to a tree.Ragna checked his palms,he was alive.They took him into the Inferunogakure's hospital.
When he woke up,the first he saw was Ragna,sleeping on the chair near him.The shinobi was nearly dead...Ragna woke up and he was so happy that the shinobi was still alive,he was happy until he saw the blood coming out of his mouth,then Ragna tried to ran to get some help,but the shinobi held his hand,and said ,,I am glad I met you,brother,now I gonna see our old man in heaven,good bye,Ragna".Ragna flinched...He didn't know what to do...All he knew,was that he was his older brother,Ragnarock..
10 years passed in Inferunogakure,and the children found home and joined the shinobi academy.Now,the journey begins with Ragna and his friends

HOPE YOU LIKED IT

« Last Edit: September 09, 2017, 14:25:32 by Ragna »






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Re: Ragna Zeimatsu
« Reply #1 on: June 16, 2017, 00:53:14 »
Cool character, welcome to SLO.

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Re: Ragna Zeimatsu
« Reply #2 on: June 16, 2017, 07:28:56 »
Did you make that character? Looks good buddy :). Welcome to SLO!! :D :D



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Re: Ragna Zeimatsu
« Reply #3 on: June 16, 2017, 08:32:19 »
Welcome to SLO.
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« Reply #4 on: June 16, 2017, 08:36:58 »
Nice character and good luck.
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Re: Ragna Zeimatsu
« Reply #5 on: June 16, 2017, 09:55:10 »
Thank you all guys :D




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Re: Ragna Zeimatsu (UPDATED STORY AND DETAILS)
« Reply #6 on: July 14, 2017, 03:59:56 »
Is your white eye a kkg or just heterochromia?
Also pretty good story :)
Yeah a few errors here and there, but in the end, I liked it.

I suggest you give a glow to the text in white, it's difficult to read in this bg


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Re: Ragna Zeimatsu (UPDATED STORY AND DETAILS)
« Reply #7 on: July 14, 2017, 12:22:38 »
Is your white eye a kkg or just heterochromia?
Also pretty good story :)
Yeah a few errors here and there, but in the end, I liked it.

I suggest you give a glow to the text in white, it's difficult to read in this bg
1.What is kkg xD
2.No it's like a pure blood potential of Zeimatsu's family

and thanks ;P




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Re: Ragna Zeimatsu (UPDATED STORY AND DETAILS)
« Reply #8 on: July 14, 2017, 14:44:36 »
Wait

Wot


your brother is called ragnarock??


besides that, evry thing pretty much went as expected....

and dude a "pure blood potential" is basically a kkg


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Re: Ragna Zeimatsu (UPDATED STORY AND DETAILS)
« Reply #9 on: July 14, 2017, 14:51:21 »
1.What is kkg xD
2.No it's like a pure blood potential of Zeimatsu's family

Kkg= kekkei genkei = pure blood potential of 'xyz' clan/ family/ individual

Like teh sharingan of uchiha
Byakugan of Hyuga
Magnet release of the third kazekage
Wood release of Shodaime Hokage
Particle style of Onoki ( I don't remember which number tsuchikage he was though.)

EDIT: Onoki's particle style is a Kekkei Tota... Haku's ice release is another example of kkg
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Re: Ragna Zeimatsu (UPDATED STORY AND DETAILS)
« Reply #10 on: July 14, 2017, 15:05:09 »
1.What is kkg xD
2.No it's like a pure blood potential of Zeimatsu's family

OOOOOHHHHH that's what kkg is.Yes it is something like that ;P

Kkg= kekkei genkei = pure blood potential of 'xyz' clan/ family/ individual

Like teh sharingan of uchiha
Byakugan of Hyuga
Magnet release of the third kazekage
Wood release of Shodaime Hokage
Particle style of Onoki ( I don't remember which number tsuchikage he was though.)

EDIT: Onoki's particle style is a Kekkei Tota... Haku's ice release is another example of kkg





 

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