Shinobi Life Online
Shinobi Life Online Category => Shinobi Life Online Clans & Organizations => Shinobi Life Online Clans => Topic started by: Uzumaki Stiles on April 30, 2017, 14:39:01
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(http://i63.tinypic.com/55ntwn.png)
Clan Name:
Nogitsu
Founder:
Nogitsu Stiles
Leader
None Atm
Affiliation
Hidden Hill
Clan history
***History Yet to Come***
Unique traits
Blue Eyes
Strengths
Ninjutsu | Fuuinjutsu
Weaknesses
Kenjutsu
Rival clans
None Atm
Allied clans
None Atm
Rankings
None Atm
Members
None Atm
Rules
1) Help People In Need
2) Team Work Always
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I'm going to give you some brutal feedback here because I haven't done so in a long time.
General outlook of your presentation?: Below acceptable in my eyes.
You should begin with removing the black background of your logo, and finding a suitable place for it on the thread - I would recommend you place it at the top in the center for visual pleasure.
The next thing I feel like commenting on is the way you've formatted everything. Your text is all over the place. Try putting everything to the left and possibly increase the size of the coloured text.
The last thing you should think about is how you've worded some phrases, such as "ppl" in "Help Ppl In Need". I understand what you're trying to say, but you seem retarded when you word things this way and your clan does not appeal to me when the presentation is so wrong.
I understand if English is not your first language and that you may struggle with it, but try and get some members of the community to help you out with the formatting and phrases.
One more thing: You should elaborate more on your clan with elements such as the rankings. Right now it's very vague. The viewers need some food for thought, be creative and drop some nice ranks in there.
*poof*
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Snoop is right. As of now your clan has too little content to be called a clan. You could have just waited until you had more stuff to fill it will before you posted it for the clan to be more appealing to members. But good luck with it nonetheless
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Good luck with your clan, dude.
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HI YOUR CLAN IS NICE GOOD LUCK WITH IT I HOPE IT CAN GROW!
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This is a below par semblance of a clan. You should take the advice of the few reasonable comments above. Good luck.
@Nova please, do something about the retarded comments messing up this dude's thread.
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iirc... isnt that a bleach mask?
Haven't watched the anime yet.... so ain't sure but it does seems like one.
It will be much better if you create your own logo/ clan symbol.
And yeah, take a look at other clan threads, you might get an idea of a presentable layout, it helps in attracting more players.
Wish you luck.
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iirc... isnt that a bleach mask?
Haven't watched the anime yet.... so ain't sure but it does seems like one.
It will be much better if you create your own logo/ clan symbol.
And yeah, take a look at other clan threads, you might get an idea of a presentable layout, it helps in attracting more players.
Wish you luck.
That's a customized ANBU mask. .-.
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good luck with your clan ;)
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good luck with your clan :)
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I see that you worked a bit on the layout.
Looks better now.
Still needs more informations about what makes your clan special.
And you dont need to write,,clan logo''above the clan logo,everyone knows that its supposed to be a clan logo.
Well.....good luck.