Shinobi Life Online
Fun Category => Games => Topic started by: Mars on October 14, 2014, 19:23:22
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I'm hosting a competition.
The winner will win a €10 donation. This will give you Chunin donator rank and you'll have early donator access.
Also, anyone can enter.
I will be hosting these every couple of weeks. This is because I want to get the community more active than it already is.
What you have to do
You must write a 250-750 word story about your SLO(Shinobi Life Online) Character and his adventures. It would be nice if you wrote about one of these topics: Where and how they trained, what they did after training, an interesting mission or a devious plan to do something exciting.
The requirements:
You must have 10 or more posts.
You must have posted twice in the past week.
Your story can't be terrible.
Good luck^-^
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does posts include involvement of the shoutbox?
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does posts include involvement of the shoutbox?
No, sorry. It's not hard to post. Just go onto the games section
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Do we post the stories here or do we send them to you through messaging?
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Do we post the stories here or do we send them to you through messaging?
Here:)
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Shisume sighed as his sandals crunched once more against the pure white snow. He watched as his clone fell through the air with a gash across his back, blood staining the innocent white ground a crimson red. The clone dispersed into a flurry of snowflakes right before the moment of impact, floating in with the rest of the snow storm. Shisume looked down the side of the steep mountain, his breathing steady despite the thin air. He could almost see the faint outline of his village, but the blizzard impaired his vision. He shook his head and shifted his weight. The snow creaked and crunched.
Such a relaxing sound… Crunch. Crunch. Crunch.
Shisume stretched his arms high above his head, yawning deeply. He suddenly clasped his hands together in a strange formation, almost like two vertical finger guns put together. The snow in front of him churned and swirled in the form of a circle before a figure slowly slid out of it. An icy replica of Shisume rose out of the ground, sluggishly gaining color and details before resembling Shisume perfectly. The short, spiky, brown hair, the piercing blue in one eye and deep purple in the other, the simple Yukigakure ninja outfit. Every last detail was remarkable. Shisume’s hand itched as he reached for his ninja tool bag, retrieving a hand full of senbon. His clone instead took out a kunai knife, going into a defensive stance. Shisume leaped into the air, his senbons beginning to shimmer a sky blue. Once they were completely enveloped in this light, he threw them right above his head. He then clasped his hands together once more, this time in a series of complicated formations.
“Ice Needle Rain!” Shisume shouted.
The senbon multiplied rapidly until they formed a several-layered dome above the clone. Every single one glowed an icy blue. Shisume felt the crunch as his feet hit the snow once more. The clone simply threw his kunai above his head and quickly performed a series of hand formations, too fast for the human eye to track. He caught his kunai in one hand and braced himself for the hit. Even though Shisume could not see the hand signs, he knew what the clone was going to do. It was his clone, after all. He narrowed his eyes.
“Fire!” he yelled once more.
The senbon rained down, all focused on a singular point: the clone. Shisume watched with suspicion as the clone was impaled time after time in all the vital areas. The shower stopped almost as quickly as it started. The clone was mid-fall, his face full of surprise, his body and head peppered with the glowing needles. Suddenly, there was a burst of smoke, and the clone was gone. A simple log instead took his place, covered in thousands of needles. Shisume narrowed his eyes and turned around, looking up. His clone was exactly where he expected him to be, behind him in the sky, falling with a kunai. Shisume smiled as he himself quickly pulled a kunai, leaping into the air. He held the kunai forward, preparing to skewer the clone. He successfully hit him, the knife sinking into his chest. Blood splattered the snow once more as the clone burst into a storm of snowflakes and floated away.
Word Count: Exactly 550 words.
Really sorry for how boring it is, the limited amount of words didn't couple well with my descriptive writing. Didn't come out too well, and doesn't really make sense that my character could defeat his clone so easily if they are the exact same in strength and such. But oh well! Guess that is just one of my many writing flaws; I write a little too much.
If I do win (Which I doubt; lol) I would like to funnel the donation to second place, because I dont wanna take someone's donator playing opportunity, but I did want to write and see if I could write anything good (which I didn't, xD) Anyway, PEACE!
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Shisume sighed as his sandals crunched once more against the pure white snow. He watched as his clone fell through the air with a gash across his back, blood staining the innocent white ground a crimson red. The clone dispersed into a flurry of snowflakes right before the moment of impact, floating in with the rest of the snow storm. Shisume looked down the side of the steep mountain, his breathing steady despite the thin air. He could almost see the faint outline of his village, but the blizzard impaired his vision. He shook his head and shifted his weight. The snow creaked and crunched.
Such a relaxing sound… Crunch. Crunch. Crunch.
Shisume stretched his arms high above his head, yawning deeply. He suddenly clasped his hands together in a strange formation, almost like two vertical finger guns put together. The snow in front of him churned and swirled in the form of a circle before a figure slowly slid out of it. An icy replica of Shisume rose out of the ground, sluggishly gaining color and details before resembling Shisume perfectly. The short, spiky, brown hair, the piercing blue in one eye and deep purple in the other, the simple Yumigakure ninja outfit. Every last detail was remarkable. Shisume’s hand itched as he reached for his ninja tool bag, retrieving a hand full of senbon. His clone instead took out a kunai knife, going into a defensive stance. Shisume leaped into the air, his senbons beginning to shimmer a sky blue. Once they were completely enveloped in this light, he threw them right above his head. He then clasped his hands together once more, this time in a series of complicated formations.
“Ice Needle Rain!” Shisume shouted.
The senbon multiplied rapidly until they formed a several-layered dome above the clone. Every single one glowed an icy blue. Shisume felt the crunch as his feet hit the snow once more. The clone simply threw his kunai above his head and quickly performed a series of hand formations, too fast for the human eye to track. He caught his kunai in one hand and braced himself for the hit. Even though Shisume could not see the hand signs, he knew what the clone was going to do. It was his clone, after all. He narrowed his eyes.
“Fire!” he yelled once more.
The senbon rained down, all focused on a singular point: the clone. Shisume watched with suspicion as the clone was impaled time after time in all the vital areas. The shower stopped almost as quickly as it started. The clone was mid-fall, his face full of surprise, his body and head peppered with the glowing needles. Suddenly, there was a burst of smoke, and the clone was gone. A simple log instead took his place, covered in thousands of needles. Shisume narrowed his eyes and turned around, looking up. His clone was exactly where he expected him to be, behind him in the sky, falling with a kunai. Shisume smiled as he himself quickly pulled a kunai, leaping into the air. He held the kunai forward, preparing to skewer the clone. He successfully hit him, the knife sinking into his chest. Blood splattered the snow once more as the clone burst into a storm of snowflakes and floated away.
Word Count: Exactly 550 words.
Really sorry for how boring it is, the limited amount of words didn't couple well with my descriptive writing. Didn't come out too well, and doesn't really make sense that my character could defeat his clone so easily if they are the exact same in strength and such. But oh well! Guess that is just one of my many writing flaws; I write a little too much.
If I do win (Which I doubt; lol) I would like to funnel the donation to second place, because I dont wanna take someone's donator playing opportunity, but I did want to write and see if I could write anything good (which I didn't, xD) Anyway, PEACE!
Brilliant story:)
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In a quiet corner in the village hidden in the sand, kasai was practicing his jutsus. Kasai was a 4 foot genin ninja. He had black hair, green eyes and a determined attitude to take on any challenge that stood in his path.
“give it a break. You’ll never complete it. Its to powerful for you.” said Segti. Segti was a boring, pesstimistic girl around Kasai’s age. She never wanted to do anything except relax and gossip.
“ I will complete the Suna Ryuudan no Jutsu and become the greatest shinobi in the village.” Cried kasai.
Suddenly, a massive explosion erupted in the village. “you thinking what I’m thinking” said Kasai.
“I don’t think your thinking what I’m thinking” studdered Segti.
“lets go”
They raced to where the explosion took place. They stopped at the edge of the crater
Standing in the crater was a 7 foot man wearing all black and had the symbol of the Akatsuki. His eyes were blue and dangerous. He had a slash mark going down his face. It starte from the eyebrow down and disappeared into his cloak.
“Don’t think you’ll get away with this” said Kasai.
“I already have” said the man.” “Doton Kazangan Taiga”
“no you don’t, Soshi Nami” said Kasai. As the rain of sand poured down, Kasai formulated a plan.
“I’m a s-level rank shinobi, do you really think that is going to stop me” said the man.
“no, but this will. Sand shuriken.”
The man dodges the attack and goes to engage Kasai in taijutsu.
As they fight, a ninja on one of the buildings is performing many hand seals at once.
“AAA.” Screamed Kasai as the man kills him with his kunai.
Poof.
“what, a clone, how? “ cries the Man.
“Suna Ryuudan no Jutsu”. The dragon enveloped the man giving him no way to escape.
Crash!!!. The dragon explodes.
When the dust settles the manis on the floor, bleeding from every part of his body.
“when did you create the clone” stammers the man to Kasai as he jumps down from the bulding and is walking to him.
“I knew I will never be able to kill you on sight so I created a clone to go ahead and get your attention.”
“meanwhile, I was creating the jutsu to kill you.” Said Kasai. I am the villages youngest shinobi to master that technique and don’t you forget it.”
As the man died, he told them that the Akatsuki will not forget this moment.
“let them come. I’ll be ready for them”. Triumphed Kasai.
“now that your done gloating, can we eat something” Segti said.
“Are you kidding, we got work to do.” Said Kasai. “but save me a sandwich please”.
words 453. hope you enjoy.
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In a quiet corner in the village hidden in the sand, kasai was practicing his jutsus. Kasai was a 4 foot genin ninja. He had black hair, green eyes and a determined attitude to take on any challenge that stood in his path.
“give it a break. You’ll never complete it. Its to powerful for you.” said Segti. Segti was a boring, pesstimistic girl around Kasai’s age. She never wanted to do anything except relax and gossip.
“ I will complete the Suna Ryuudan no Jutsu and become the greatest shinobi in the village.” Cried kasai.
Suddenly, a massive explosion erupted in the village. “you thinking what I’m thinking” said Kasai.
“I don’t think your thinking what I’m thinking” studdered Segti.
“lets go”
They raced to where the explosion took place. They stopped at the edge of the crater
Standing in the crater was a 7 foot man wearing all black and had the symbol of the Akatsuki. His eyes were blue and dangerous. He had a slash mark going down his face. It starte from the eyebrow down and disappeared into his cloak.
“Don’t think you’ll get away with this” said Kasai.
“I already have” said the man.” “Doton Kazangan Taiga”
“no you don’t, Soshi Nami” said Kasai. As the rain of sand poured down, Kasai formulated a plan.
“I’m a s-level rank shinobi, do you really think that is going to stop me” said the man.
“no, but this will. Sand shuriken.”
The man dodges the attack and goes to engage Kasai in taijutsu.
As they fight, a ninja on one of the buildings is performing many hand seals at once.
“AAA.” Screamed Kasai as the man kills him with his kunai.
Poof.
“what, a clone, how? “ cries the Man.
“Suna Ryuudan no Jutsu”. The dragon enveloped the man giving him no way to escape.
Crash!!!. The dragon explodes.
When the dust settles the manis on the floor, bleeding from every part of his body.
“when did you create the clone” stammers the man to Kasai as he jumps down from the bulding and is walking to him.
“I knew I will never be able to kill you on sight so I created a clone to go ahead and get your attention.”
“meanwhile, I was creating the jutsu to kill you.” Said Kasai. I am the villages youngest shinobi to master that technique and don’t you forget it.”
As the man died, he told them that the Akatsuki will not forget this moment.
“let them come. I’ll be ready for them”. Triumphed Kasai.
“now that your done gloating, can we eat something” Segti said.
“Are you kidding, we got work to do.” Said Kasai. “but save me a sandwich please”.
words 453. hope you enjoy.
Read, and being judged atm, nice work:)
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wow pretty good stories so far
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Searson is a quite shy and mischievous 17 year old boy who seems to dislike people. He does not like to get involved in things and he hates crowds. Searson is known to be hated/disliked by girls that he tries to talk to, and because of this he suffered depression. He would always be seen looking very sad/depressed. Searson's dream was to possess supernatural powers and become a god, to show the people how great he is, and for girls to finally like him.
Searson went to Calderock High school where he made friends that he did not consider friends but acquaintances. His friends were Kent the male, and two girls Cindy and Kimara (who were considered pretty). Kent was a loud mouth. Kent always took the role of a bully or an agressive person, who sometimes insulted Searson and showed off. Searson did not like him a lot but he remained silent.
Kent knew Searson had a crush on Kimara, and tells him that he did not like Kimara, or Cindy. Searson felt slightly relieved now that he had less competition, but he had a feeling Kimara already disliked him as he is used to girls hating him naturally. After graduating high school Cindy invited Searson to a party which also included Kimara. Searson was glad that a girl invited him to a party in the night, and although he did not like parties, he accepted her invitation. He wanted to see if this party was different.
When Searson arrived at the party he saw Cindy, Kimara and Kent sitting at a table. They gave him a signal to come sit with them and he went. Searson felt a little joy to be hanging with girls. He sat down they started a conversation, Searson remained quiet most of the time. After a while, Searson became so shocked when he saw Kimara sitting in Kent's lap. They were laughing and having fun. Kimara while in Kent's lap made fun of Searson and they laughed. Searson pretended he did not see or hear, he felt embarrased, but then he even became more shocked when he saw Cindy sitting in Kent's lap after Kimara got up.
Searson did not want this to look like it affected him, so he looked away the whole time and remained silent. After about 30 minutes, Searson got up and left the party without saying goodbye to anyone. While walking home he thought to himself that it was the worst idea to go to that party. He wondered if Cindy invited him to the party just to do that and make him feel bad. He wondered if it was all a plan.
Searson stopped and fell to the ground on his knees, in tears on the lonely road in the middle of the night. Only street lights lit the street. He was angry, jealous and pissed. He cried and cried in rage. He did not realize that he was emitting a strange red chakra from his body and he punched the ground in rage which created a huge crator. Searson suddenly stopped crying and looked to see what he had done in shock, be backed away and looked at the crator with wide eyes. He looks at his hand and it looked normal. Searson tries to punch the ground again and it cracked. Searson paused for about 5 minutes wondering if it was a dream.
Chakra that looked like red flames started forming vigorously around Searson and he panics, until he realized it did nothing to him. He feels a immense amount of energy, he felt like he could do anything. Searson's eyes were blood red and he looked like a cold blooded killer. Searson felt a little joy since he finally thought he gained some supernatural power that he thought did not exist in humans. He wonders what to do next and he seemed to teleport to the peak of the tallest mountain, over looking the city in the night. It was a beautiful sight. Searson says to himself
"Am I finally above all human beings or are other human beings with this strange power out there? But must"
"Will girls like me now, or hate me more because of this strange power?"
"I want to show off in Kent's face and also his girls, that he said he did not like"
"If other humans are out there with this power I may end up in a fight with them, I bet they are stronger than me, maybe not"
"What should I do now that I have this power"
There is a lot more that I could write, but I have a project now. Ill leave it at this until the next time, where I continue the story maybe.
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Searson is a quite shy and mischievous 17 year old boy who seems to dislike people. He does not like to get involved in things and he hates crowds. Searson is known to be hated/disliked by girls that he tries to talk to, and because of this he suffered depression. He would always be seen looking very sad/depressed. Searson's dream was to possess supernatural powers and become a god, to show the people how great he is, and for girls to finally like him.
Searson went to Calderock High school where he made friends that he did not consider friends but acquaintances. His friends were Kent the male, and two girls Cindy and Kimara (who were considered pretty). Kent was a loud mouth. Kent always took the role of a bully or an agressive person, who sometimes insulted Searson and showed off. Searson did not like him a lot but he remained silent.
Kent knew Searson had a crush on Kimara, and tells him that he did not like Kimara, or Cindy. Searson felt slightly relieved now that he had less competition, but he had a feeling Kimara already disliked him as he is used to girls hating him naturally. After graduating high school Cindy invited Searson to a party which also included Kimara. Searson was glad that a girl invited him to a party in the night, and although he did not like parties, he accepted her invitation. He wanted to see if this party was different.
When Searson arrived at the party he saw Cindy, Kimara and Kent sitting at a table. They gave him a signal to come sit with them and he went. Searson felt a little joy to be hanging with girls. He sat down they started a conversation, Searson remained quiet most of the time. After a while, Searson became so shocked when he saw Kimara sitting in Kent's lap. They were laughing and having fun. Kimara while in Kent's lap made fun of Searson and they laughed. Searson pretended he did not see or hear, he felt embarrased, but then he even became more shocked when he saw Cindy sitting in Kent's lap after Kimara got up.
Searson did not want this to look like it affected him, so he looked away the whole time and remained silent. After about 30 minutes, Searson got up and left the party without saying goodbye to anyone. While walking home he thought to himself that it was the worst idea to go to that party. He wondered if Cindy invited him to the party just to do that and make him feel bad. He wondered if it was all a plan.
Searson stopped and fell to the ground on his knees, in tears on the lonely road in the middle of the night. Only street lights lit the street. He was angry, jealous and pissed. He cried and cried in rage. He did not realize that he was emitting a strange red chakra from his body and he punched the ground in rage which created a huge crator. Searson suddenly stopped crying and looked to see what he had done in shock, be backed away and looked at the crator with wide eyes. He looks at his hand and it looked normal. Searson tries to punch the ground again and it cracked. Searson paused for about 5 minutes wondering if it was a dream.
Chakra that looked like red flames started forming vigorously around Searson and he panics, until he realized it did nothing to him. He feels a immense amount of energy, he felt like he could do anything. Searson's eyes were blood red and he looked like a cold blooded killer. Searson felt a little joy since he finally thought he gained some supernatural power that he thought did not exist in humans. He wonders what to do next and he seemed to teleport to the peak of the tallest mountain, over looking the city in the night. It was a beautiful sight. Searson says to himself
"Am I finally above all human beings or are other human beings with this strange power out there? But must"
"Will girls like me now, or hate me more because of this strange power?"
"I want to show off in Kent's face and also his girls, that he said he did not like"
"If other humans are out there with this power I may end up in a fight with them, I bet they are stronger than me, maybe not"
"What should I do now that I have this power"
There is a lot more that I could write, but I have a project now. Ill leave it at this until the next time, where I continue the story maybe.
Another marvelous story, this is very original as it's not about a shinobi graduating from academy and going on an s class mission straight of and going full super saiyan on everyones ass. Well done:)
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Hataka Uchiha: Born and raised in the hidden leaf, as and Uchiha. I have mangekyo sharingan at age 15. My brother died by a senju which caused me to unlock these eyes. I will seek him and kill my brothers murderer.
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Hataka Uchiha: Born and raised in the hidden leaf, as and Uchiha. I have mangekyo sharingan at age 15. My brother died by a senju which caused me to unlock these eyes. I will seek him and kill my brothers murderer.
I think we have a WINNER!!!
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W I N N E R I N O B O Y S
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Hataka Uchiha: Born and raised in the hidden leaf, as and Uchiha. I have mangekyo sharingan at age 15. My brother died by a senju which caused me to unlock these eyes. I will seek him and kill my brothers murderer.
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Hataka Uchiha: Born and raised in the hidden leaf, as and Uchiha. I have mangekyo sharingan at age 15. My brother died by a senju which caused me to unlock these eyes. I will seek him and kill my brothers murderer.
I think we have a WINNER!!!
Oh the sarcasm
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Another marvelous story, this is very original as it's not about a shinobi graduating from academy and going on an s class mission straight of and going full super saiyan on everyones ass. Well done:)
Hey Mars! Do I need to create a character in the Character session of the forum, before i post a story here?
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Hey Mars! Do I need to create a character in the Character session of the forum, before i post a story here?
Nope, you're good. Just go with what your imagination tells you c:
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My story takes place in the Hidden Thunder village. This concept image of the village (by EternalEyes) inspired mi imagination :D
(http://i1089.photobucket.com/albums/i349/gurivan/SLO_hidden_thunder1.png)
- I think he won’t come – he said, without taking his eye off the Lightning Ball – He’s a coward, Hana.
- Not just him, I’m scared too. You’re the only guy who likes this place, Shinsei. And that’s because of your new job.
Shinsei was a genin from the Hidden Thunder Village. After the last Great War, as the world fell into peace, mission requests have decreased. For a low-level ninja like him, it was even more difficult. So he started working on the village power plant, a massive building that gathers the lightning bolt energy and distributes it to the village. Periodically, someone had to climb the tower to do the maintenance of the equipment. They started hiring ninjas to do it, due to their ability to climb walls. Near the top of the tower, Shinsei found a place where he had a great view of the strikes at the ball. Earlier that day, he challenged his teammates to go up there. He and Anna climbed up together, and were waiting for Uryū to arrive.
- You won. We’re leaving – and they started climbing down the tower - You know I hate that job. I just need the money. But I like this place… I always felt attracted to thunderbolts and stuff.
- It’s your chakra nature, isn’t it?
- Yes, but I didn’t master it yet. It’s been a while since me and Naoi trained together.
His elder sister Naoi, a former kunoichi, took the role of both parents to care of him, after their father left the village. Their mother was killed during a mission while Shinsei was still a baby. Afraid of taking more risks, she quit the shinobi’s life. She also taught him ninjutsu, and lately how to use his Lightning nature, which was hers too.
- I was trying to channel my chakra into weapons, to improve their cutting capacities.
- Seems tough.
- You’re right, It’s like searching for something in the darkness.
And the darkness fell over the world.
- What’s this? – Hana asked, scared.
- A problem in the power supply, I guess – He tried to seem calm – I’m gonna climb up again, and see what happened. Stay there.
- OK. Take care.
He started hearing explosions down in the village, and understood that someone was attacking the village. When he arrived, there was nothing but darkness. But then a thunderbolt fell, and he saw the cables which linked the Ball to the village were disconnected. He walks towards them, in order to put them back, and then realizes there’s someone behind him. He turns, and all he sees is a fist coming to his face.
- Gaaahh!
The punch threw him to the floor, and then he sees the blade. He jumps to his side, and avoid the blow. When another thunder falls, he can see his enemy’s face.
- Uryū?!
- You challenged me to come here. You forget, rat?
Uryū was the most prodigious ninja of his age, and member of a traditional clan from the village, while Shinsei was the son of a rogue ninja. In his eyes, there was only despise…
- Why are you doing this to OUR village?
- This village is rotting away. The ninjas are treated like sh*t. All we’re doing is to give a reason of the ninja’s existence. You should thank me.
- This is madness! – Shinsei’s rage was building – I’m gonna stop you!
Shinsei threw his shurikens at his mate, even though he couldn’t see him. But he could hear the sounds that resembled metal hitting a rock.
- Hahaha! – Uruū jumps towards him - You forget about my earth ninjutsu? I can make my skin as hard as diamond!
Uryū then strikes Shinsei again, and again, and one more time, leaving him almost unconsciousness. Deep in his mind, Shinsei can hear his sister, and the lightning chakra training.
- This is ironic – says Uryū - Precisely this night, when I’m sent here for this mission, you challenge me.
Then Shinsei wakes up, with his former teammate staring at him. He grabs a kunai.
- That’s useless – Uryū said – and then he sees Shinsei’s kunai shining.
- That’s not coincidence. Destiny wanted me here to stop you!
With a single blow, his Kunai pierces through Uryū’s flesh.
- I said I would stop you… - suddenly, Shinsei feels sad - we were supposed to be friends…
He then gets up, reactivates the power plant, and falls to the ground.
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Exactly 750 words.
I wanted it to be more focused on the characters, and their relationship, but i had more than 900 words and the story hadn't even reached its climax :o
So it has a dose of protagonism that I couldn't avoid. And except for my english limitations, i think the story is OK. Hope you like it 8)
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My story takes place in the Hidden Thunder village. This concept image of the village (by EternalEyes) inspired mi imagination :D
(http://i1089.photobucket.com/albums/i349/gurivan/SLO_hidden_thunder1.png)
- I think he won’t come – he said, without taking his eye off the Lightning Ball – He’s a coward, Hana.
- Not just him, I’m scared too. You’re the only guy who likes this place, Shinsei. And that’s because of your new job.
Shinsei was a genin from the Hidden Thunder Village. After the last Great War, as the world fell into peace, mission requests have decreased. For a low-level ninja like him, it was even more difficult. So he started working on the village power plant, a massive building that gathers the lightning bolt energy and distributes it to the village. Periodically, someone had to climb the tower to do the maintenance of the equipment. They started hiring ninjas to do it, due to their ability to climb walls. Near the top of the tower, Shinsei found a place where he had a great view of the strikes at the ball. Earlier that day, he challenged his teammates to go up there. He and Anna climbed up together, and were waiting for Uryū to arrive.
- You won. We’re leaving – and they started climbing down the tower - You know I hate that job. I just need the money. But I like this place… I always felt attracted to thunderbolts and stuff.
- It’s your chakra nature, isn’t it?
- Yes, but I didn’t master it yet. It’s been a while since me and Naoi trained together.
His elder sister Naoi, a former kunoichi, took the role of both parents to care of him, after their father left the village. Their mother was killed during a mission while Shinsei was still a baby. Afraid of taking more risks, she quit the shinobi’s life. She also taught him ninjutsu, and lately how to use his Lightning nature, which was hers too.
- I was trying to channel my chakra into weapons, to improve their cutting capacities.
- Seems tough.
- You’re right, It’s like searching for something in the darkness.
And the darkness fell over the world.
- What’s this? – Hana asked, scared.
- A problem in the power supply, I guess – He tried to seem calm – I’m gonna climb up again, and see what happened. Stay there.
- OK. Take care.
He started hearing explosions down in the village, and understood that someone was attacking the village. When he arrived, there was nothing but darkness. But then a thunderbolt fell, and he saw the cables which linked the Ball to the village were disconnected. He walks towards them, in order to put them back, and then realizes there’s someone behind him. He turns, and all he sees is a fist coming to his face.
- Gaaahh!
The punch threw him to the floor, and then he sees the blade. He jumps to his side, and avoid the blow. When another thunder falls, he can see his enemy’s face.
- Uryū?!
- You challenged me to come here. You forget, rat?
Uryū was the most prodigious ninja of his age, and member of a traditional clan from the village, while Shinsei was the son of a rogue ninja. In his eyes, there was only despise…
- Why are you doing this to OUR village?
- This village is rotting away. The ninjas are treated like sh*t. All we’re doing is to give a reason of the ninja’s existence. You should thank me.
- This is madness! – Shinsei’s rage was building – I’m gonna stop you!
Shinsei threw his shurikens at his mate, even though he couldn’t see him. But he could hear the sounds that resembled metal hitting a rock.
- Hahaha! – Uruū jumps towards him - You forget about my earth ninjutsu? I can make my skin as hard as diamond!
Uryū then strikes Shinsei again, and again, and one more time, leaving him almost unconsciousness. Deep in his mind, Shinsei can hear his sister, and the lightning chakra training.
- This is ironic – says Uryū - Precisely this night, when I’m sent here for this mission, you challenge me.
Then Shinsei wakes up, with his former teammate staring at him. He grabs a kunai.
- That’s useless – Uryū said – and then he sees Shinsei’s kunai shining.
- That’s not coincidence. Destiny wanted me here to stop you!
With a single blow, his Kunai pierces through Uryū’s flesh.
- I said I would stop you… - suddenly, Shinsei feels sad - we were supposed to be friends…
He then gets up, reactivates the power plant, and falls to the ground.
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Exactly 750 words.
I wanted it to be more focused on the characters, and their relationship, but i had more than 900 words and the story hadn't even reached its climax :o
So it has a dose of protagonism that I couldn't avoid. And except for my english limitations, i think the story is OK. Hope you like it 8)
Nice story dude:)
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Uchiha Kai
Description of the character's personality:
Kai is a proud Uchiha and very confident (Rank: Captain) who is willing to sacrifice everything to get what he wants, which he usually gets through hard work, sweat, tears and steel-hard determination, though he doesn't seem to mind stepping on some toes on his way up. However if he at any time doesn't succeeds in what he wants to do, he is very likely to feel down. However when time comes he overcomes his defeat and rises stronger and even more determined than before.
Although rather introverted, Kai is one of the most emotionally driven Samurai in the Village and far more emotional when he fights while protecting something. Even as a the captain of the Squad, he always kept a certain distance from his teammates. According to one of his teammates, Kai was afraid to get to know them as he might start to like them which, eventually, happens. He has always acted alone without making friends and appeared to not know the meaning of friendship after being alone and friendless most of his life, only caring for his cursed Clan, which was completely annihilated by Itachi Uchiha(Except Sasuke & him). As the series progresses, he matures and becomes more open with his teammates and grows more comfortable around them.
His most distinguished trait is his sense of pride and fairness.
Although a tough guy, he has a soft spot for animals, showing the more human side of his nature than the cool, collected and silent front he usually has.
Description of the character's history:
Kai grew up an orphan, not knowing who his parents were. Alone in the world, Kai dreamed of one day becoming the Hokage so that the people of the village would acknowledge his existence.But as an Uchiha & orphan, people used to fear & curse him all the time.
So after trying so long, he finally gave up and at the age of 10(Just before Uchiha Massacre) he left the village. After wandering for about 2 years he ends up captured by Samurai's.But the General Mifune saw potential in him & taken him in his personal custody. After 6 Years of hard training given by Mifune himself,he appointed as Captain as because of his highly perceptive, observant, and intelligent individual mind, also during this time of period he successfully activated Sharingan(3-3 tomoe). He mastered his Ligthing nature(which was his primary chakra nature). Apart from that he is also working on his Fire nature.
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Shisume sighed as his sandals crunched once more against the pure white snow. He watched as his clone fell through the air with a gash across his back, blood staining the innocent white ground a crimson red. The clone dispersed into a flurry of snowflakes right before the moment of impact, floating in with the rest of the snow storm. Shisume looked down the side of the steep mountain, his breathing steady despite the thin air. He could almost see the faint outline of his village, but the blizzard impaired his vision. He shook his head and shifted his weight. The snow creaked and crunched.
Such a relaxing sound… Crunch. Crunch. Crunch.
Shisume stretched his arms high above his head, yawning deeply. He suddenly clasped his hands together in a strange formation, almost like two vertical finger guns put together. The snow in front of him churned and swirled in the form of a circle before a figure slowly slid out of it. An icy replica of Shisume rose out of the ground, sluggishly gaining color and details before resembling Shisume perfectly. The short, spiky, brown hair, the piercing blue in one eye and deep purple in the other, the simple Yukigakure ninja outfit. Every last detail was remarkable. Shisume’s hand itched as he reached for his ninja tool bag, retrieving a hand full of senbon. His clone instead took out a kunai knife, going into a defensive stance. Shisume leaped into the air, his senbons beginning to shimmer a sky blue. Once they were completely enveloped in this light, he threw them right above his head. He then clasped his hands together once more, this time in a series of complicated formations.
“Ice Needle Rain!” Shisume shouted.
The senbon multiplied rapidly until they formed a several-layered dome above the clone. Every single one glowed an icy blue. Shisume felt the crunch as his feet hit the snow once more. The clone simply threw his kunai above his head and quickly performed a series of hand formations, too fast for the human eye to track. He caught his kunai in one hand and braced himself for the hit. Even though Shisume could not see the hand signs, he knew what the clone was going to do. It was his clone, after all. He narrowed his eyes.
“Fire!” he yelled once more.
The senbon rained down, all focused on a singular point: the clone. Shisume watched with suspicion as the clone was impaled time after time in all the vital areas. The shower stopped almost as quickly as it started. The clone was mid-fall, his face full of surprise, his body and head peppered with the glowing needles. Suddenly, there was a burst of smoke, and the clone was gone. A simple log instead took his place, covered in thousands of needles. Shisume narrowed his eyes and turned around, looking up. His clone was exactly where he expected him to be, behind him in the sky, falling with a kunai. Shisume smiled as he himself quickly pulled a kunai, leaping into the air. He held the kunai forward, preparing to skewer the clone. He successfully hit him, the knife sinking into his chest. Blood splattered the snow once more as the clone burst into a storm of snowflakes and floated away.
Word Count: Exactly 550 words.
Really sorry for how boring it is, the limited amount of words didn't couple well with my descriptive writing. Didn't come out too well, and doesn't really make sense that my character could defeat his clone so easily if they are the exact same in strength and such. But oh well! Guess that is just one of my many writing flaws; I write a little too much.
If I do win (Which I doubt; lol) I would like to funnel the donation to second place, because I dont wanna take someone's donator playing opportunity, but I did want to write and see if I could write anything good (which I didn't, xD) Anyway, PEACE!
That's really good, I liked your descriptive writing.
Oh and I already wrote mine, if you didn't notice ;)
Nice story dude:)
Thanks, Mars!
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Name: Nagare Hano
It was another rainy day in the farmer village when a small-time farmer called Hikugakei found the little Nagare Hano. He was fast asleep and probably was left there by his family, the farmer found a note with the little boy that said:
Nagare Hano
Hikugakei immediately knew this was the boys name. As Nagare grew up Hikugakei became more attached to him and Nagare became more attached to the farmer. One day Hikugakei had finally saved up enough money for a little trip at the sea side, hikugakei wanted to learn Nagare how to swim and that went way too well on the first try. Nagare was totally in his element, even though he was only 5 years old, he swam so fast and perfect it was almost like he was flying just above the water. And at that moment Hikugakei knew there was something special about this kid, afraid that someone was after Nagare, Hikugakei took the young boy to a hidden village. At the front gate they were held up for identifications, Hikugakei explained everything and they gave Hikugakei and Nagare a home to live in, it was not much but at least they had a safe place to call home. Then the time came for Nagare to go to the ninja academy, he was a rather fast learner and like everything about school, from shuriken throwing to chakra control lessons. He made a few friends, with whom Nagare would always play after school. However, as Nagare grew older and older, Hikugakei grew older too and just before the academy exams Hikugakei died in a chair by Nagare's bed. When Nagare found out, he had never felt such an emotion. He had never been attached to anyone like this before and now the only person he had ever truly loved was dead. This only made Nagare train harder with the motivation: I have to get stronger, for grandpa! And all this hard training finally resulted in him passing the exams and thus becoming a Genin. He got paired up with two really skilled shinobi and a caring sensei, together they went trough E rank missions, until high B rank missions. Finally everyone became a chunin and it was time to split up, Nagare wanted to retire from being a shinobi a little to find out more about his past. He went to the village where he had lived with the farmer and asked around a bit, all the neighbours were glad to see him and gave him all the information there was. However, all information he got was that Farmer Hikugakei was not really family. He wanted to know more about his last name, so he traveled all around to ask about the Hano clan. After years of searching, he found ancient ruins of his clan's village. He did not cry over the loss of his family, instead he searched around for hints about the past. After a few days he found some scrolls containing the secret jutsu of his clan, he set up a camp at the ruins and spent years there to practice an learn those jutsu. and finally, he mastered all the 83 jutsu in the scrolls. However, he still wasn't statisfied. After all, he came here to learn more about the past of his clan. He kept searching for months, until on a sunny day he saw a trapdoor he had never noticed before. He tried to open the trapdoor, but it was sealed off with a jutsu only known to the Hano clan. and thus trying out every single jutsu he had learned from the scroll he finally opened the trapdoor. Inside there were a few notes that said he was not the only one left of the Hano clan and that there are more survivors of the ancient tragedy that took the life of the whole clan. As he kept searching, he saw mischief everywhere. from a beating to robbing, he saw nearly all crimes one could commit except for murder. Until the day he saw a rogue organization kill off innocent people, he just lost control and went all out on them. And while he was a Jonin those rogue ninja were only genin. so he easily beat them up, after the beating he interrogated them. He even killed some of them who didn't want to answer. After that day, the same organization became more active everyday. and that was one of his main reasons to start the organization Nami no Kishi together with his old Squad 3 friends, Hachemon and Takashi. Together they have been going on bounty hunting adventures and epic missions to finish off evil. And the best thing was, they got payed for their work by regular people and also by Kage's and Feudal lords. However, the true reason for him to start this organization was to find his fellow Hano clan members by traveling all over the world he must find a few members right? However until this very moment he is yet to find any fellow members. And finally he gave up searching for now, and focused on the future of Nami no Kishi. He has had some epic adventures along with his friends form Nami no Kishi. However those are other stories yet to be told.
The End
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Shisume sighed as his sandals crunched once more against the pure white snow. He watched as his clone fell through the air with a gash across his back, blood staining the innocent white ground a crimson red. The clone dispersed into a flurry of snowflakes right before the moment of impact, floating in with the rest of the snow storm. Shisume looked down the side of the steep mountain, his breathing steady despite the thin air. He could almost see the faint outline of his village, but the blizzard impaired his vision. He shook his head and shifted his weight. The snow creaked and crunched.
Such a relaxing sound… Crunch. Crunch. Crunch.
Shisume stretched his arms high above his head, yawning deeply. He suddenly clasped his hands together in a strange formation, almost like two vertical finger guns put together. The snow in front of him churned and swirled in the form of a circle before a figure slowly slid out of it. An icy replica of Shisume rose out of the ground, sluggishly gaining color and details before resembling Shisume perfectly. The short, spiky, brown hair, the piercing blue in one eye and deep purple in the other, the simple Yukigakure ninja outfit. Every last detail was remarkable. Shisume’s hand itched as he reached for his ninja tool bag, retrieving a hand full of senbon. His clone instead took out a kunai knife, going into a defensive stance. Shisume leaped into the air, his senbons beginning to shimmer a sky blue. Once they were completely enveloped in this light, he threw them right above his head. He then clasped his hands together once more, this time in a series of complicated formations.
“Ice Needle Rain!” Shisume shouted.
The senbon multiplied rapidly until they formed a several-layered dome above the clone. Every single one glowed an icy blue. Shisume felt the crunch as his feet hit the snow once more. The clone simply threw his kunai above his head and quickly performed a series of hand formations, too fast for the human eye to track. He caught his kunai in one hand and braced himself for the hit. Even though Shisume could not see the hand signs, he knew what the clone was going to do. It was his clone, after all. He narrowed his eyes.
“Fire!” he yelled once more.
The senbon rained down, all focused on a singular point: the clone. Shisume watched with suspicion as the clone was impaled time after time in all the vital areas. The shower stopped almost as quickly as it started. The clone was mid-fall, his face full of surprise, his body and head peppered with the glowing needles. Suddenly, there was a burst of smoke, and the clone was gone. A simple log instead took his place, covered in thousands of needles. Shisume narrowed his eyes and turned around, looking up. His clone was exactly where he expected him to be, behind him in the sky, falling with a kunai. Shisume smiled as he himself quickly pulled a kunai, leaping into the air. He held the kunai forward, preparing to skewer the clone. He successfully hit him, the knife sinking into his chest. Blood splattered the snow once more as the clone burst into a storm of snowflakes and floated away.
Word Count: Exactly 550 words.
Really sorry for how boring it is, the limited amount of words didn't couple well with my descriptive writing. Didn't come out too well, and doesn't really make sense that my character could defeat his clone so easily if they are the exact same in strength and such. But oh well! Guess that is just one of my many writing flaws; I write a little too much.
If I do win (Which I doubt; lol) I would like to funnel the donation to second place, because I dont wanna take someone's donator playing opportunity, but I did want to write and see if I could write anything good (which I didn't, xD) Anyway, PEACE!
That's really good, I liked your descriptive writing.
Oh and I already wrote mine, if you didn't notice ;)
Yup, I did see it! It was really well done! You did a great job as well!
Also, thanks for the complement! I'm glad I was the first one to post, so Mars could expand the word limit and let others write a bit more. Really excited for any last-minutes before the competition ends!
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Shadow, feel like helping me judge the stories? As you don't want the prize even if you win.
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Shadow, feel like helping me judge the stories? As you don't want the prize even if you win.
When are you planning to finish this?
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Uchiha Kai
Description of the character's personality:
Kai is a proud Uchiha and very confident (Rank: Captain) who is willing to sacrifice everything to get what he wants, which he usually gets through hard work, sweat, tears and steel-hard determination, though he doesn't seem to mind stepping on some toes on his way up. However if he at any time doesn't succeeds in what he wants to do, he is very likely to feel down. However when time comes he overcomes his defeat and rises stronger and even more determined than before.
Although rather introverted, Kai is one of the most emotionally driven Samurai in the Village and far more emotional when he fights while protecting something. Even as a the captain of the Squad, he always kept a certain distance from his teammates. According to one of his teammates, Kai was afraid to get to know them as he might start to like them which, eventually, happens. He has always acted alone without making friends and appeared to not know the meaning of friendship after being alone and friendless most of his life, only caring for his cursed Clan, which was completely annihilated by Itachi Uchiha(Except Sasuke & him). As the series progresses, he matures and becomes more open with his teammates and grows more comfortable around them.
His most distinguished trait is his sense of pride and fairness.
Although a tough guy, he has a soft spot for animals, showing the more human side of his nature than the cool, collected and silent front he usually has.
Description of the character's history:
Kai grew up an orphan, not knowing who his parents were. Alone in the world, Kai dreamed of one day becoming the Hokage so that the people of the village would acknowledge his existence.But as an Uchiha & orphan, people used to fear & curse him all the time.
So after trying so long, he finally gave up and at the age of 10(Just before Uchiha Massacre) he left the village. After wandering for about 2 years he ends up captured by Samurai's.But the General Mifune saw potential in him & taken him in his personal custody. After 6 Years of hard training given by Mifune himself,he appointed as Captain as because of his highly perceptive, observant, and intelligent individual mind, also during this time of period he successfully activated Sharingan(3-3 tomoe). He mastered his Ligthing nature(which was his primary chakra nature). Apart from that he is also working on his Fire nature.
Nice
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Shadow, feel like helping me judge the stories? As you don't want the prize even if you win.
When are you planning to finish this?
Today
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Name: Nagare Hano
It was another rainy day in the farmer village when a small-time farmer called Hikugakei found the little Nagare Hano. He was fast asleep and probably was left there by his family, the farmer found a note with the little boy that said:
Nagare Hano
Hikugakei immediately knew this was the boys name. As Nagare grew up Hikugakei became more attached to him and Nagare became more attached to the farmer. One day Hikugakei had finally saved up enough money for a little trip at the sea side, hikugakei wanted to learn Nagare how to swim and that went way too well on the first try. Nagare was totally in his element, even though he was only 5 years old, he swam so fast and perfect it was almost like he was flying just above the water. And at that moment Hikugakei knew there was something special about this kid, afraid that someone was after Nagare, Hikugakei took the young boy to a hidden village. At the front gate they were held up for identifications, Hikugakei explained everything and they gave Hikugakei and Nagare a home to live in, it was not much but at least they had a safe place to call home. Then the time came for Nagare to go to the ninja academy, he was a rather fast learner and like everything about school, from shuriken throwing to chakra control lessons. He made a few friends, with whom Nagare would always play after school. However, as Nagare grew older and older, Hikugakei grew older too and just before the academy exams Hikugakei died in a chair by Nagare's bed. When Nagare found out, he had never felt such an emotion. He had never been attached to anyone like this before and now the only person he had ever truly loved was dead. This only made Nagare train harder with the motivation: I have to get stronger, for grandpa! And all this hard training finally resulted in him passing the exams and thus becoming a Genin. He got paired up with two really skilled shinobi and a caring sensei, together they went trough E rank missions, until high B rank missions. Finally everyone became a chunin and it was time to split up, Nagare wanted to retire from being a shinobi a little to find out more about his past. He went to the village where he had lived with the farmer and asked around a bit, all the neighbours were glad to see him and gave him all the information there was. However, all information he got was that Farmer Hikugakei was not really family. He wanted to know more about his last name, so he traveled all around to ask about the Hano clan. After years of searching, he found ancient ruins of his clan's village. He did not cry over the loss of his family, instead he searched around for hints about the past. After a few days he found some scrolls containing the secret jutsu of his clan, he set up a camp at the ruins and spent years there to practice an learn those jutsu. and finally, he mastered all the 83 jutsu in the scrolls. However, he still wasn't statisfied. After all, he came here to learn more about the past of his clan. He kept searching for months, until on a sunny day he saw a trapdoor he had never noticed before. He tried to open the trapdoor, but it was sealed off with a jutsu only known to the Hano clan. and thus trying out every single jutsu he had learned from the scroll he finally opened the trapdoor. Inside there were a few notes that said he was not the only one left of the Hano clan and that there are more survivors of the ancient tragedy that took the life of the whole clan. As he kept searching, he saw mischief everywhere. from a beating to robbing, he saw nearly all crimes one could commit except for murder. Until the day he saw a rogue organization kill off innocent people, he just lost control and went all out on them. And while he was a Jonin those rogue ninja were only genin. so he easily beat them up, after the beating he interrogated them. He even killed some of them who didn't want to answer. After that day, the same organization became more active everyday. and that was one of his main reasons to start the organization Nami no Kishi together with his old Squad 3 friends, Hachemon and Takashi. Together they have been going on bounty hunting adventures and epic missions to finish off evil. And the best thing was, they got payed for their work by regular people and also by Kage's and Feudal lords. However, the true reason for him to start this organization was to find his fellow Hano clan members by traveling all over the world he must find a few members right? However until this very moment he is yet to find any fellow members. And finally he gave up searching for now, and focused on the future of Nami no Kishi. He has had some epic adventures along with his friends form Nami no Kishi. However those are other stories yet to be told.
The End
Very nice:D
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Well done!
Shinsei has won. I'll donate for you now
Closely followed by many others.
CaptainSpoon was the runner up, unfortunately you don't get a prize, better luck next time.
You all did really well and I'll be hosting something like this next month.
Note: Shadow would of won imo but he didn't want to take the prize as he's already a donator. Big shout out to you man:)
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I WOOOOON!
I'm really happy about this, it was my first fic!
Thanks Shadow, I would choose your story too.
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Congratulations man :D
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Mars can i be a judge for the next one. it was fun reading them
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Mars can i be a judge for the next one. it was fun reading them
Did a good job last time, I don't see why not:)
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Mars can i be a judge for the next one. it was fun reading them
Did a good job last time, I don't see why not:)
Sweet
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I'm only happy I came in third place, never would have guessed I did it so well :P